自學托福輕松上百-寫作
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小編：環(huán)球教育整理 847當一道作文題站在你面前的時候，是不是瞬間變身天秤座了?覺得agree也有道理，disagree也有道理，但是無論選哪邊都不好辦。而且，正在選擇綜合癥的你，這時候已經(jīng)把剛才的那7個詞忘干凈了，真的一點殘留都沒有。
溫馨提示，那7個詞是development，details, organisation, cohesion, sentence structure, word choice, variety.
從Development開始，在這里并非發(fā)展的意思，而是拓展，讓你的思路展開。也就是說，假如我們選擇了立場，disagree, 咱不覺得有錢就是成功，那么必須說說 除了錢以外還有什么是成功的衡量標準。這時候就需要開腦洞地思考。其實不難想出來，還有名譽，知識，甚至，愛，或者 大家的尊重。是不是瞬間覺得更有話說了?從中挑選兩三個吧，每個都是一個觀點，都能寫成一段。
這里有一個黃金原則，給觀點，必給解釋;給解釋，必給例子。觀點+解釋+例子是優(yōu)秀論述的典型結(jié)構(gòu)。
這就是detail發(fā)揮作用的地方。比如，寫“尊重”的那一段：I believe that being respected by coworkers indicates success. (觀點)+Without that respect, money means little. (解釋)+For example, I once did some work for a top attorney in a law firm. He made a very good salary, but he wasn’t a nice man. No one ever did work for him willingly. He ordered everyone around, and we didn’t respect him. In contrast, however, I had a wonderful band director in high school. He had to take extra jobs just to make enough money to support his family. However, his students had great respect for him and always listened to what he said. As a result, we were a very good band. (例子) + As a result, we were a very good band. In my opinion, my band director was more successful than the attorney was.(最好像這樣說完例子再溫馨提示一下剛才自己的觀點)。
于是我們挑3個分觀點，名譽，尊重，和知識，足夠?qū)懗梢黄俣嘧值奈恼?。順便這也自然地構(gòu)成了organisation，每個觀點寫一段，再加首尾段就剛好是5個段落，一篇好文。
比如：
Many people believe that a large income equals success.(說趨勢) I believe, however, that success is more than how much money you make.(大白話說清楚我的觀點) Some of those measures of success include fame, respect, and knowledge.(拓展解釋)
Most people assume that famous people are rich people, but that isn’t always true.(分觀點一) For example, some day I would like to be a famous researcher. Few scientists are rich by today’s standards.(例子細節(jié)) Still I will feel myself to be successful if I am well-known.(解釋個人情感) Additionally, there are many famous humanitarians who are not rich. Mother Theresa was one. Certainly, no one would say she was not successful.(例子細節(jié))
I also believe that being respected by coworkers indicates success(分觀點二). Without that respect, money means little. (解釋)For example, I once did some work for a top attorney in a law firm. He made a very good salary, but he wasn’t a nice man. No one ever did work for him willingly. He ordered everyone around, and we didn’t respect him.(例子細節(jié)) In contrast, however, I had a wonderful band director in high school. He had to take extra jobs just to make enough money to support his family. However, his students had great respect for him and always listened to what he said. As a result, we were a very good band.(還是例子細節(jié)) In my opinion, my band director was more successful than the attorney was.(重申強調(diào)觀點)
Finally, I think one of the most important indicators of success is knowledge. (分觀點三)Wealthy people don’t know all the answers.(解釋) For example, in the movie Good Will Hunting, the only person who could solve some complex problems was the janitor. He knew a lot, and decided what he wanted to do with that knowledge rather than just think about money. (例子細節(jié))In my opinion, he was extremely successful.(重申強調(diào)觀點)
When we think of history, there are few people that we remember simply because they were rich.(重申強調(diào)觀點) Overall, we remember people who did something with their lives - they were influential in politics, or contributed to science or art or religion.(總結(jié)) If history is the ultimate judge of success, then money surely isn’t everything.(升華)
這一番分析其實已經(jīng)講了那7個詞中的4個(development，details, organisation, cohesion)，這4個詞的基礎(chǔ)是母語的組織能力，也就是中學語文作文的思維能力。若要說區(qū)別，那就是西方的語文表達更傾向于直白和具象?？傮w來說，這種語言拓展和組織能力，對于中學語文尚可的考生來說，是可以通過多看幾篇官方文章和自己練習就能在兩周內(nèi)學會的。
